The Meet Cute

If you’ve ever watched The Holiday (and if you haven’t you must watch it ASAP!) you might remember Walter telling Iris how all the best classic films started with a meet cute. That cute, usually funny, totally random moment of coincidence when the hero and heroine meet. The moment that marks the beginning of their journey to their very own HEA.

Since I am a fan of the meet cute, in movies or books, it should come as no surprise that I’ve made an effort to create a meet cute in my WIP. Mine includes a close call, an exchange of insults, plenty of sarcasm (since that’s an ingredient I can’t seem to shake), and a touch of attraction. Unwelcome attraction, but attraction all the same.

To set this up, Bryan has just nearly run over Celi in her apartment complex parking lot. For the record, and because Bryan would never forgive me if I don’t make this clear, it’s completely Celi’s fault.

Oh shit. Oh shit. Oh shit.
Heart racing out of his chest, Bryan ignored the rocks digging into his skin as he knelt over the woman he might have just killed. Her eyes were closed, her body still. Only when her breath brushed his cheek did Bryan realize he’d been holding his own.
She’s alive.
A glance down the length of her body revealed a magazine open across one leg and a scattering of white envelopes, but no blood or obvious broken bones. A head injury would be hard to determine through the mass of chestnut curls spread across the pavement.
Reaching to move those curls brought him nose to nose with the woman and Bryan nearly jumped to his feet when her eyes flew open. Staring into blues eyes the color of the sky before a storm, his heart not only stopped racing; it stopped completely.
“Am I still alive?” she asked calmly.
“It seems that way.”
“Damn.”
The woman made an effort to sit up; groaned and laid back. Looking up to the sky once more she said, “Where the hell did that car come from? It almost killed me.”
Adrenaline still pumping, fear for her life changed to irritation at the idea this was somehow his fault. Bryan sat back on his heels. “Where did I come from? Where did you come from? I only almost killed you because you walked out in front of me.”
“You’re the idiot that almost ran me over?” she asked raising her head as far off the ground as she could without getting up. Her eyes grew darker and a wrinkle appeared between her brows.
“Idiot?” She called him an idiot. Amazing. “I’m the idiot? You walked out in front of me. You’re lucky I was able to stop at all.” Talk about ungrateful.
“Lucky? I’m the one laying on the ground and I’m the lucky one?”
Bryan raised his voice to match hers. “You’re only laying on the ground because you walked in front of a moving car. You never even looked. How can that be my fault?”
Sure he couldn’t get any angrier, the banshee proved him wrong with her next statement.
“Of course, nothing could be your fault. Typical male.”

Needless to say, the scene goes down hill from here. Celi comes out of it with a broken cell phone, a broken heel (on her shoe), and a badly bruised hip. Bryan comes out of it with a damaged ego, a good dose of frustration, and pity for the man who ends up with this crazy woman. Ha! Little does he know.

This is one of the few scenes to survive the great deletion of 2008. I’m glad it did. I kind of like it. A furious exchange of insults is something with which I’m well acquainted.

Next time, we’ll move to the second run-in. Right now, I’m working very hard to turn my limited POV into deep POV. Wish me luck.

19 thoughts on “The Meet Cute”

  1. Quantum says:

    Thats cute Terri.
    Very cute! *grin*

  2. TerriOsburn says:

    You know what’s terrible? Now that I read this back, I think it’s pretty bad. Needs loads of work. Now I understand why writers have such a hard time letting their stuff go out on submission. LOL!

  3. 2nd Chance says:

    I love the “Damn” when told she’s still alive… Typical reaction to a bad day, I assume?

  4. Beth says:

    Terri you’ve got talent no doubt about it. I’m looking forward to the next installment.

  5. TerriOsburn says:

    I guess I should have mentioned that too. Celi is just getting home on a Friday from a terrible day at work which started with the words FATAL ERROR on her computer screen. LOL! She’s not in the best mood to deal with the situation.

    Beth – Thanks! As a book professional, that means a lot coming from you. 🙂

  6. Janga says:

    I’m glad you are keeping your meet cute. I ove it!

  7. TerriOsburn says:

    Thanks, Janga! And I thought about taking your advice and tweeting the update, but I couldn’t do it. So I facebooked it instead. 🙂

  8. Di R says:

    I can’t wait to read more!

    I love this-can’t wait until they realize they’re neighbors.

    Di

  9. TerriOsburn says:

    Thanks, Di. That is the next bit to come. I’ll post it next week sometime.

    In this scene, Bryan sort of gets the last word. Not so in the next. LOL!

  10. irisheyes says:

    Don’t change a thing. That is very cute and a great tease to see where this animosity is going to lead.

    I was going to comment on exactly what Chance did – with one word “Damn” – you get the whole history of how things are going in her life right now without even having backstory. That’s pretty awesome.

    I’m jealous (in a good way) – I’ve been trying to do the meet cute for months now and am about ready to give it up.

  11. TerriOsburn says:

    Irish – Thank you! Once you’ve lived with it and have read it a million times, it’s hard to see it as a reader would.

    You know, I’d be happy to help out with that. You know where to find me if you ever want to bounce some ideas.

  12. MsHellion says:

    Well, you know what they say about deep POV–it’s all about the level of penetration…and no one level of penetration works the entire time, you need to vary it up so we don’t get distracted from what’s going on.

  13. TerriOsburn says:

    Varying degrees of penetration. That’s something I’m familiar with.

  14. Renee says:

    This sounds like a lot of fun. Definitely looking forward to more.

  15. TerriOsburn says:

    Thanks, Renee. Hope you’re still sailing on the conference high and the words are flying onto the paper.

  16. Renee says:

    LMAO! Terri. I’ve put a deadline on Bewitching the Highlander. And then I got this brilliant idea to move into the paranormal realm. I was a bit nervous but it seems to be working.

  17. TerriOsburn says:

    Not you too! We’re losing everyone to the dark side.

    I did try a very short para once when my chapter challenged people to write something in a genre in which we’d never write. It was kind of nice that I could make things up and if asked why it was that way, I could say “Because I said so.” That is awesome!

  18. Renee says:

    What is funny, is the paranormal has lightened up the story.

    We’ll see how it all goes.

  19. Tris says:

    I love it! Sounds like fun =D

    Celi’s attitude “Where the hell did that car come from? It almost killed me” was a total scream. I think she’s going to drive Bryan crazy *g*

    Great meet cute – can’t wait to hear more =)

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